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David Steinhoff – Head of Development posted an update 7 years, 10 months ago
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David Steinhoff – Head of Development wrote a new post, Kayla's song 7 years, 10 months ago
Collaboration
UK based composer, Dale Sumner and Czech POP princess, Petra Caramela are both well known to the Sentient development community.
Petra created an alluring love song and pe […]
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David Steinhoff – Head of Development posted an update 8 years, 1 month ago
Check out Composer Dale Sumner’s work on the Sentient soundtrack.
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David Steinhoff – Head of Development wrote a new post, Soundtrack – Dale Sumner – 'First contact' 8 years, 1 month ago
Haunting
When the Sentient enter a space, they scan it.The waves cause materials to RESONATE thus creating that tell-tale, ‘Tibetan singing bowl’ style hum.
Commission
Presence Global Ente […]
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David Steinhoff – Head of Development wrote a new post, Soundtrack – Jeff Bernstein 9 years, 5 months ago
Commission
We tasked Scotland UK based composer, Jeff Bernstein to explore soundtrack concepts for the new Sci-fi TV series, Sentient.Brief
The Australian pilot features a character called Sam. Sam is […]
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wow! yehh it has got the tension to the unknown 🙂
love the record with the arrow too , hint hint ;))))-
JB will be very happy to hear that!
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Thanks for that Petra, greatly appreciated !
JB
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Wow! Chilling atmosphere that omen thrilling tension! Great job!
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Thank you Ahmed, greatly appreciated.
JB
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Great track!!!!
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Cheers Steve !
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David Steinhoff – Head of Development wrote a new post, The Stone Papers 9 years, 5 months ago
Surviving alien colonisation
The Stone Papers address the science of survival after the arrival of the Sentient.Dr. Craig Stone has a Ph.D. in Nuclear Chemistry with a thesis on experimental and theoretical […]
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David Steinhoff – Head of Development posted an update 9 years, 8 months ago
Just published. The Character profile template – Downloadable
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David Steinhoff – Head of Development commented on the post, Sponsorship update 9 years, 10 months ago
In reply to: David Steinhoff – Head of Development wrote a new post, Sponsorship update Results for June 2015 The June push for sponsorship from business was unsuccessful. Here’s why: The Australian Tax Office i […] ViewThe Sydney model is meant to provide a guide for everyone as to how to do it.
The reason why we hit the wall here so far is the mix of the property boom and the capital write-offs being increased to $20,000. That plus the very aggressive charity industry run by the big end of town.Pitching a great idea is not enough. Not even a business idea…[Read more]
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David Steinhoff – Head of Development posted an update 9 years, 10 months ago
Have we gone past the point of no return? One of Sentient’s strongest hooks is the concept that the survival of the planet may depend of the arrival of this alien life form.- Diana T Black
Sentient is a new sci-fi TV series being developed by Presence Global Entertainment.
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Ebuka Okparauzoma – Screenwriter/Director/Creative Producer. commented on the post, Abilities of the Sentient 9 years, 11 months ago
In reply to: David Steinhoff – Head of Development wrote a new post, Abilities of the Sentient The Journal I don’t have to tell you what will happen if anyone finds this journal. Have I made myself clear? Good, […] ViewSuper! Guess there will be a part two.
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David Steinhoff – Head of Development commented on the post, Sentient – Pilot update – May 20th 2015 10 years ago
In reply to: David Steinhoff – Head of Development wrote a new post, Sentient – Pilot update – May 20th 2015 The Season One page lists each advance of the script. The latest update to the pilot went up May 20th […] ViewI really appreciate how important it is for actors to have good scripts, strong characters and engaging drama. Amon Teicher is a very interesting character. I must publish a character guide of Amon, Dowd and Friesner to provide a greater background. That said the choices a character makes in a story reveals all we can every really know about them…[Read more]
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David Steinhoff – Head of Development commented on the post, Sentient – Pilot update – May 20th 2015 10 years ago
In reply to: David Steinhoff – Head of Development wrote a new post, Sentient – Pilot update – May 20th 2015 The Season One page lists each advance of the script. The latest update to the pilot went up May 20th […] ViewIt’s an artform. No easy job.
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Hello Dave and all,
I can’t just help it wanting to keep reading and reading. In fact I hungry for more than ever. Brilliant, thrilling, breathtaking and suspense-filled.
Sets the pace for more revelations. More actions. Smart Dog “HEC WALLER” is he?
Cheers,
Ebuka
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Thanks so much Ebuka.
Hec is smart and in fact named after a famous Australian Navy hero from WW2.Do post if you spot any errors or have any enhancements to offer.
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Non I can figure for now.
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Yes, good. I found the Dowd/Teicher interaction a little bit more interesting. The only problem may be that the in business with the bomb/mine, the action was a little confusing and also has one wondering if the bomb disposal is part of the premise, especially if thee’s a fatality, but I assume not it just gets Dowd into hospital.
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Hi David,
Thanks so much.BOMB/ MINE
How would you make it clearer?THE EVENT WITH THE BOMB MINE
The Admiral’s son has just been killed on his watch. Friesner turns up in the hospital to tell him even if you live, you wish you hadn’t. Friesner will use this event to make Dowd’s life a misery in within the next few pages. Plus, Dowd has a personal friendship with the Admiral and when they meet again….-
Friesner – oh yeah sorry a ‘find’ didn’t work, i probably misspelled him. Frank being the admiral’s son is mentioned in the script but a viewer won’t know that yet?
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COMMODORE FRIESNER is top of PAGE THREE.
AIDEN FRANK – YES, that is a wicked cheat on my part isn’t it. We’ll have to put a floating ARROW that animates saying This guy is the Admiral’s son.
We’ll sort it in the next scene when we meet ADMIRAL FRANK.
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Clarifying action. Maybe it’ll be fine as is on screen. How does Frank actually detonate the mine? He still thinks its the bomb and attempts to lay charges?
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I should read it again later. Visual imaging isn’t clear yet this early in the morning for me but one detail’s been bugging me.. If you see someone with dried blood all over them, wouldn’t you assume they’re already dead? I don’t think he needed to check for a pulse. Do we get a WTF moment at the end of the pilot? I’d like to read the rest of it. ^_^
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Lex,
Re-read
Of course. At your leisure.Already dead
I wouldn’t BUT we should check some views on that.WTF
Yeah, we should try to end each Act with a WTF moment to keep people watching.Read the rest of it
Me too! It’s not written yet.
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Great work David, It’s so well written.
I want to know what happens next!Tim
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Thanks so much Tim. ;o)
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Liked what I’ve read thus far, David. Got me hooked. Nice beginning. Though, if I can be a bit critical, I was not impressed with Freisner’s lines. Less is more here I think. An uncertain/smug smile would telegraph a lot more than an obvious set-up of dislike between Dowd and he. Teicher’s character is intriguing. Wanted to know more. But that’s good. The dog worried me a bit, but I do not know where this part of the story is going, so I’m prepared for a man/hero to have a best friend in the midst of hell. 🙂
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Thanks Daniel,
Looking into Friesner.
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Nice. Very nice actually. I like dogs. My sheep dog still rounds me up.
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PS: AMON TEICHER, oh really. Message received.
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Inside voice, outside voice. But seriously, I like characters that intrigue me. I just spoke openly. And that’s fair dinkum. 🙂
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I really appreciate how important it is for actors to have good scripts, strong characters and engaging drama. Amon Teicher is a very interesting character. I must publish a character guide of Amon, Dowd and Friesner to provide a greater background. That said the choices a character makes in a story reveals all we can every really know about them from an audience’s perspective.
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Agreed, David. The choices are all we ever know. And in a great script all we ever need to know. But I guess that leap from simply good to greatness is not only in the casting – which remains paramount, but in the script’s subtext reflected in the character’s eyes. In other words: if the actor’s lights are on then someone is home; a brain is thinking, a heart is beating. Then the magic happens. I watch David Lean’s “Lawrence of Arabia” once a year as a matter of course, pleasure and movie education. It never ceases to amaze me how complete that film is. But it is Peter O’Toole’s remarkable performance and David Lean’s vision that continue to make me bow to the Gods of Art. To know how high the bar has been set to achieve acting and cinematic “greatness” in perpetuity.
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Preaching to the converted brother. I hear that. Design is the key.Design of every element.
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I am entertained … but a bit confused by some of the dialogue … perhaps I have to read it again, but it’s kinda like when someone is talking with references to things that are only in their own head, so no one else can understand … I wasn’t getting the conversation that was happening
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Dialogue is often layered in meanings and repeated with different meanings.
The line, ‘What do you see?’ is employed as a segue in the pilot and employed twice. Same meaning, very different outcome.The line, ‘He knows you’ referring to Hec Waller is used by the Teicher three times and you might think why? For an actor, there is more going on there and a follow through, ‘I don’t’.
The characters are disoriented and impaired so they way they speak or rather they language they employ needs to reflect that.
Later, we will reverse the,’He knows you’ and employ the Admiral saying, ‘I don’t know you’. Here is a man who is clearly distressed post the events of the loss of his son and his survival of the storm but now he has early onset Alz. Same flow of dialogue but employed to achieve a new effect.
Actors like this kind of work as it allows them to go to town.
The important thing about dialogue is that it is NOT Q and A. Here is a post you can read that explains some of the tricks to writing great dialogue.
http://www.journeyoftheseeds-themovie.com/wp-content/uploads/2014/07/The-forbidden-secrets-to-writing-great-dialogue-for-film-and-TV-by-David-Steinhoff-Presence-Films.pdf-
Nice tips on dialogue construction. Good one Dave.
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It’s an artform. No easy job.
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Sure
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Agreed!
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Actually those weren’t the bits I didn’t understand … there were bits after that for which I had no reference point at all & just seemed like two people speaking random unrelated nonsense which on,y just barely constituted a sentence but which no one could understand externally without first being inside their heads … that’s what I’m referring to, so as I said I may just have to read it again, but at the time it went from the bit you’re referring to which was fine, into a section that seemed to make no sense at all
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Never mind … I just re-read it now, I must have been very tired when I read it the first time, as I’d somehow switched the sequence in my mind or accidentally ripped forward &/or back pages without noticing & thus gotten the sequence wrong so that it didn’t make sense.
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*flipped forward
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TRANSITIONS AND CAMERA DIRECTIONS
I received some private feedback criticising the lack of TRANSITIONS and CAMERA DIRECTIONS.
Just to clarify, it is NOT the job a writer to indicate transitions and camera directions.Yes, in a shooting script, no for a script in development.
No director wants to be dictated to by a writer. Planning and executing HOW they will shoot it, is their job. Let them direct.
Even transitions, whilst you may choose to indicate your preference of transition, why not let your editor surprise you? Once again, that’s their job.
Writers need to focus on the STORYTELLING outcomes WE CAN ACHIEVE and let the directors and editors do their job. They are the next LEVEL of storytelling beyond the writers but not the last. That’s reserved for my favourites, our long-suffering COMPOSERS.
Regards
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Yeah Dave. I was taught that too. In a spec-script no need for CAMERA DIRECTIONS and TRANSITIONS. I researched and got the same message too.
The writer stays focus on STORYTELLING.
Cheers,
Ebuka
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Good advice E.
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A message to SENTIENT’s female team members regards the most recent PILOT script.
We have just under thirty comments regards the new pilot and NOT ONE FEMALE VOICE. -
WHY NOT MAKE THE SENTIENT, DANGEROUS FROM THE GET-GO?
If post there awakening the SENTIENT were surprised to find human survivors and perceived them as immediate threats then we would be at war from the get-go.
That would heighten the action and risk.
SO, where would THE SENTIENT PART COME FROM?
When the Sentient begin to discover a little about our journey, even become attracted to us in their second stage/ state, there may be a chance for some humans and some Sentient to find a way forward BUT this would be bitterly resented by the hardliners on both sides. -
A few suggestions…
I feel the flashback scene with the trainees is too long and a bit distracting. Maybe use mini-flashbacks or flashes of memory as Dowd is disoriented and still recovering so it keeps momentum in the scene but shows he is drawing on his own training while under duress.
I’m not sure why Dowd would threaten Teicher with the fire extinguisher – at this point I expect Dowd to be wary but focused on making an ally of Teicher before resorting to threats. While O2 is at a premium, they need to work together for the best outcome. And so overcome their conflict, which is yet to be determined.
The level of Dowd’s facial palsy needs to be established. It immediately indicates a neurological issue, which could have been caused by the incident and the barometric chamber. But if his nerve damage is severe, his affected eye will have a very droopy lower lid and be constantly watery; also the side of his mouth will be droopy so he will have very slurred speech and will constantly drool. So this will affect his character and he will be immediately aware of his condition – it won’t be a secret that Teicher can keep, as indicated on page 9. Dowd can wear an eye patch (sexy!) but the droopy mouth and drool… not sexy!
Also, the blood pooling in the eyes like the dead people suggests they’re also on their way to the same fate – suggesting significant neurological damage. I suggest sub-conjunctival haemhorrages which look bad but are just the blood vessels on the white part of the eye that have burst, due to pressure of some kind. And maybe just nosebleeds instead. Also, should the dog have the same symptoms ie bleeding nose/eyes as the people? Or is he ‘special’?
Also, Aussie spelling for ‘dishevelled’ on page 1, line 1.
Overall, an interesting beginning…to the end! 🙂 AA-
Panda,
Thanks so much for the feedback.FLASHBACK – IS IT TOO LONG?
That flashback; establishes in Dowd’s mind what he thinks is happening, the procedure to address it and therefore objective and finally Dowd’s perceived threat, ‘someone is coming to kill them’. It also introduces the character in their full professional setting so we know they are a person of stature within their community and a leader.I get the concern re the length. We could fuzzy it up and shorten it but as far as communication to an audience is concerned, that would be job done. Foundations laid.
THREAT – DOES DOWD THREATEN TEICHER?
Dowd does NOT threaten Teicher with a fire extinguisher. The audience are meant to get that impression early, then realise this is for what is potentially waiting for them outside. Dowd has indicated with his STARE INTO THE ABYSS and the REVERSE SHOT, SOMETHING STARING BACK, and then by LOCKING THE DOOR BEHIND HIM and jamming a chair into it that he perceives a THREAT outside. The FLASHBACK concludes with, ‘SOMEONE IS COMING TO KILL YOU’ then DOWD hears a noise and we set up that the THREAT may already be there. SO, Dowd may appear to threaten Teicher BUT we soon see that his focus is on what is OUTSIDE. The SET UP is all there and sequential. I kept it as straight-forward and sequential as I could.DOWD’S FACE
Many survivors experience temporary effects that mimic blindness, stroke and other. They pass. So, all the survivors and the Sentient recover.HEC WALLER – THE DOG
The attack is focused just on humans, the number one predator on the planet.SPELL
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Okey dokey…that clears up those questions.
I’d still be careful with the facial palsy – having studied and worked in that area for more than 15 years, a nerve palsy like that can take 6 months to resolve. While it may not be a problem for some, it will be for the pedantic know-it-alls like me 🙂
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You think it might beggar belief?
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I’m late to the game, sorry about that! I really like it- no feedback from me, nor criticism. Really quite intrigued!
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David Steinhoff – Head of Development commented on the post, Sentient – Trailer storyboard 10 years ago
In reply to: David Steinhoff – Head of Development wrote a new post, Sentient – Trailer storyboard Storyboard artist, Brendan Tolley created a series of boards to explore Sentient’s opening trailer. The work is a […] ViewDavid Nerlich created a shot to take the place of EXT: SYDNEY. CIRCULAR QUAY – NIGHT.
It’s a look down that views the red snow falling effect.
We’ve posted it to the trailer page or you can view it large on our Vimeo channel.Vimeo
https://vimeo.com/channels/907120Trailer page
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David Steinhoff – Head of Development posted an update 10 years ago
Have you seen Brendan Tolley’s storyboards for the trailer?
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David Beamish – Actor posted an update 10 years, 2 months ago
@Wavager Dave, I gotta say that the animation/promo clip that I saw upon logging in makes me both impressed & excited 🙂
Following our discussion the other week, the idea of taking Sentient onwards & upwards is exactly what I want to be a part of and I will offer my networks & skills to make it happen. We will be invited to SuperNova soon…-
Thanks so much David. David Nerlich did our original trailer. We’ll be doing a new one ASAP and I am really keen to see you front of camera this year.
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David Steinhoff – Head of Development commented on the post, Lore of the Sentient 10 years, 2 months ago
In reply to: David Steinhoff – Head of Development wrote a new post, Lore of the Sentient Catch-up Missed the first two Sentient posts? View Part One – Sentient (featuring the story model, the synopsis, the science and […] ViewIt’s interesting as the two players, humanity and the sentient could find a way to work together. Indigenous Australians and Euro Australian are finding a way. It’s a very similar situation.
Ne’er the less, before we get to the potential of collaboration there will be blood.
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David Steinhoff – Head of Development posted an update 10 years, 6 months ago
The song we sing, sings us into existence.
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David Steinhoff – Head of Development posted an update in the group
The COMPOSERS and all things sound 10 years, 9 months agoPresence Films welcomes Minneapolis based composer Andy Kotz to the ‘Journey of the seeds’ development team.
http://www.journeyoftheseeds-themovie.com/members/akmusic/profile/
Incredible work, Dale. You really nailed the vibe on this. Twisted. Disturbing. Psychotic. Love it.
wow.. very hauntigly scaryy.. powerful and tense! big up!