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    David Steinhoff – Head of Development commented on the post, Sentient – Theme and character arc – Part Two – Important Questionnaire 1 day, 4 hours ago

    In reply to: David Steinhoff – Head of Development wrote a new post, Sentient – Theme and character arc – Part Two – Important Questionnaire Background Reviews of ‘Sentient’ – Draft Four of the Pilot,  were critical of our […] View

    DANG! Apparently, the POLL service auto disables after 250 views.
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    David Steinhoff – Head of Development commented on the post, Sentient – Theme and character arc – Part Two – Important Questionnaire 1 day, 23 hours ago

    In reply to: David Steinhoff – Head of Development wrote a new post, Sentient – Theme and character arc – Part Two – Important Questionnaire Background Reviews of ‘Sentient’ – Draft Four of the Pilot,  were critical of our […] View

    I like the way you have summed this up and your suggestions Amber.

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    David Steinhoff – Head of Development commented on the post, Sentient – Theme and character arc – Part Two – Important Questionnaire 2 days, 10 hours ago

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    A helpful insight Derek. Thanks.

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    David Steinhoff – Head of Development commented on the post, Sentient – Theme and character arc – Part Two – Important Questionnaire 2 days, 10 hours ago

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    Thanks E

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    David Steinhoff – Head of Development commented on the post, Sentient – Theme and character arc – Part Two – Important Questionnaire 3 days ago

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    Thanks for letting us know Andrew.

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    David Steinhoff – Head of Development commented on the post, Sentient – Theme and character arc – Part Two – Important Questionnaire 3 days, 1 hour ago

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    Yes, you nailed it. That is the intention even if the outcome is shockingly different.

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    David Steinhoff – Head of Development wrote a new post, Sentient – Theme and character arc – Part Two – Important Questionnaire 3 days, 4 hours ago

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    Reviews of ‘Sentient’ – Draft Four of the Pilot,  were critical of our failure to address the issues of theme and character arc. 

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      Ray Sinclair replied 3 days, 1 hour ago

      A man of God, would fight for his godly principles , not against them. Might be cliched by ie good against evil works because the battle is a old as recoded time 🤔👍

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        Derek Stephen McPhail replied 2 days, 10 hours ago

        “good against evil” is a relatively recent patriarchal notion over the past 5000 years. this ultimately encourages embracing the divine half of the universe and the demonizing the other half.

        the original matriarchal culture from the dawn of time saw the universal duality as “light against darkness”. the path of transcendence, like in Taoism or the Toltec philosophy, is found by embracing the totality, including both the light and darkness.

        a man of knowledge recognizes our eternal psychic connection with the “Indigenous Soul” / “Great Spirit” / the “Sea of Spirit”, that we all swim in, as we evolve our awareness, the true “meaning of life”.

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      Ray Sinclair replied 3 days, 1 hour ago

      I like the proposal , but the twist could be that his creator , was actually acting for the good of humanity in the final analysis🤔

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        David Steinhoff - Head of Development replied 3 days, 1 hour ago

        Yes, you nailed it. That is the intention even if the outcome is shockingly different.

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      Andrew Nemeth replied 3 days ago

      I am for the original version and showing how contagious the ugly side of humanity can be once your cornered even if you are not human.

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        David Steinhoff - Head of Development replied 3 days ago

        Thanks for letting us know Andrew.

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      Ebuka Okparauzoma - Screenwriter/Director/Creative Producer. replied 2 days, 10 hours ago

      Sticking with the original logline.

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        David Steinhoff - Head of Development replied 2 days, 10 hours ago

        Thanks E

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      Derek Stephen McPhail replied 2 days, 10 hours ago

      a variation of your first theme option works better for me.

      God’s natural law relates to the evolution of consciousness. if people-kind continue its materialistic denial of synchronicity (our psychic connection with all forms of life), it’s only natural we become the author of its own extinction event.

      “People-kind is flawed and responsible for its own replacement.”

      you guys are approaching this issue of faith from a shallow point of view. I don’t see Dowd’s conflict having anything to do with his faith in God.

      I see “Dowd” as an Ozzie mixed-blood, part Aboriginal / part Brit, who has firmly embraced his “Indigenous soul” since a child. this means he has deep faith in his connection to the collective consciousness (God / Great Spirit) and therefore is open to what can be learned from dreams, higher life forms and alternative spiritual healing strategies. however, his neo-colonial / imperialistic wife, “Commodore Katheryn Freisler”, has drunk the materialistic Kool-Aid and only has faith in “modern” pharmaceutical drugs and surgical procedures, like the questionable chemotherapy the doctors encourage them to treat the Leukaemia threatened Tobias.

      when their beloved son dies horribly, this causes Dowd deep grief, anger and resentment of his wife, modern doctors and his materialistic culture. being a proud and skilled warrior from his years as a Navy diver, he at first is willing to do his part against the “evil” aliens. Dowd then begins to question his government’s paranoia, however apparently justified. this would better explain his being conflicted with Katheryn, the ultimate breakdown in their relationship and his eventual attraction to the Siren Kayla.

      logline options: I would stick with the “original” logline. your alternative proposals smack of a fundamentalist religious theme, rather than a “spiritual transformation”.

      as an aboriginal person, I have a problem with your “Old Testament” notion of an angry God. most of the planet’s population do not share this Abrahamic notion of God. as mentioned above:

      God’s natural law relates to the evolution of consciousness. if people-kind continue its materialistic denial of synchronicity (our psychic connection with all forms of life), it’s only natural we become the author of its own extinction event.

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        David Steinhoff - Head of Development replied 2 days, 10 hours ago

        A helpful insight Derek. Thanks.

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      Amber Kinghorn - Writer replied 1 day, 23 hours ago

      I like the original logline-let the fact his faith plays such a part unfold with the story.

      I love the proposed theme ‘Humanity is flawed and due for replacement.’ (I mean we all know this is true right? 😉) But does the Creator have the right to upgrade?
      I wasn’t sold on the foundation of faith at first maybe because in the forces you may see and do some things while ‘Serving Australia with Pride’ that would contradict your beliefs or certainly cause great internal conflict (so perhaps it’s something Dowd has always struggled with) but I can see how it will fit with the proposed storylines, death, love, power, leadership and of course the ego…is mankind really the superior species?
      And the tag line I would not say God I’d just say
      ‘There’s a new plan for earth.
      Humanity’s not part of it.’

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        David Steinhoff - Head of Development replied 1 day, 23 hours ago

        I like the way you have summed this up and your suggestions Amber.

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      DANG! Apparently, the POLL service auto disables after 250 views.
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    David Steinhoff – Head of Development commented on the post, Theme and character arc 3 weeks ago

    In reply to: David Steinhoff – Head of Development wrote a new post, Theme and character arc The reviews of Sentient were critical of our failure to address theme and character arc. I remember back in Film and TV school […] View

    More on THEME.
    Let your theme be your story Sherpa.
    Theme should be expressed as a QUESTION or a PROVOCATIVE STATEMENT that provokes a clear OPPOSITION that allows us to explore that theme from every angle possible leading to the MESSAGE and resolve.

    • The protagonist’s character arc = theme.
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    David Steinhoff – Head of Development commented on the post, Sentient Australia – Pilot – Draft Four 3 weeks, 4 days ago

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    In response to Naira’s review;

    Double mumbo jumbo

    Blake Snyder in his book save the cat speaks of double mumbo-jumbo.

    This is where you confuse mythology, mythology and genre.

    We have a problem with this in the current screenplay.

    The alien thing speaks of science fiction. The God mythology speaks of another genre.

    In the TV…[Read more]

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    David Steinhoff – Head of Development commented on the post, Sentient Psychology – The Alien Mind 3 weeks, 4 days ago

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    From Naira Gevorkyan
    Sentient Psychology — The Alien Mind

    I absolutely loved it — Very well-thought-out concept which also has a true dramatic core. I mean, the description itself flows as a story which is wonderful.

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    David Steinhoff – Head of Development commented on the post, Theme and character arc 3 weeks, 4 days ago

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    Thanks so much Ebuka.

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    David Steinhoff – Head of Development wrote a new post, Theme and character arc 1 month ago

    The reviews of Sentient were critical of our failure to address theme and character arc.

    I remember back in Film and TV school asking my lecturers, ‘What is theme?’ Nobody knew. No one would even spe […]

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      Ebuka Okparauzoma - Screenwriter/Director/Creative Producer. replied 3 weeks, 4 days ago

      Awesome!!!

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        David Steinhoff - Head of Development replied 3 weeks, 4 days ago

        Thanks so much Ebuka.

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      David Steinhoff - Head of Development replied 3 weeks ago

      More on THEME.
      Let your theme be your story Sherpa.
      Theme should be expressed as a QUESTION or a PROVOCATIVE STATEMENT that provokes a clear OPPOSITION that allows us to explore that theme from every angle possible leading to the MESSAGE and resolve.

      • The protagonist’s character arc = theme.
      • The protagonist and the nemesis = Two halves of the same coin.
      • Theme has many faces to explore to fully explore it
      * Each character in the story will help to explore some facet or degree of the theme.

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    Soundscape – Combine the hum of the San Francisco golden gate bridge with thunder plus rain and empty city to create that unique haunting feeling.

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    Just re-published – the haunting sounds of the Sentient – now with two works by composer Dale Sumner, Inspired by the sounds of the Sentient.

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