By Irina Penn

Synopsis: Jade is overcome by a desire to self-harm

Location: Pretoria – South Africa


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2 Responses

  1. Nate Smith says:

    I think this is a very good start, although I was a little confused whether or not you intended to make her a zombie, or if she is a vampire… I look forward to further developments in the script. I was a little bit taken aback by the fadeout. I would love to know your reasoning behind this. It might play better without that and instead cutting to something else for a brief second and then back to the sink… Just an idea. Definitely strong concept though.


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